这十道题涵盖文章与评论写作的五项技能：开头、分开描述与评价、为看法提供依据、保持稳定的读者称呼，以及以推荐语结尾。所有对象都是虚构的，每个答案都由我们原创。
请先在纸上写出自己的答案，再打开详解。题目由易到难。做完后，把每个错题记进错题记录与重测队列，并用摘要选择与改写工作室或写作修改对照视图修改自己的草稿。
题目
1. 哪个开头适合校刊上一篇关于虚构的 Night Kite Festival 的文章？ (a) “Here I am going to write about the Night Kite Festival.” (b) “Imagine a beach at dusk, and a hundred kites glowing above it like slow fireworks.”
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(b)。 它用陌生人也能想象的画面开场，没有宣布任务。(a) 是对着考官说话，没有给读者任何好奇的理由。见写出适合大众读者的开头。
2. 这个开头有什么问题？“Hello teacher, here is my review of the Night Kite Festival.”
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它对着老师说话而不是校刊读者，还宣布了任务。更好的写法是从主题和态度开始：“The Night Kite Festival proves that a cheap piece of paper can still steal an evening.” 见 L01。
3. 给每句话标上 D（描述）或 J（评价）。 (a) The festival takes place on the beach every March. (b) The lantern parade was too short to enjoy properly. (c) Families bring their own kites, and volunteers sell paper ones. (d) The glowing tails made the sky feel alive.
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(a) D，(b) J，(c) D，(d) J。(b) 和 (d) 含有评价词：too short、feel alive。(a) 和 (c) 是读者可以核对的事实。见把描述和评价分开写。
4. 把这句话拆成一句描述和一句评价：“The festival is a colourful event with hundreds of kites, and it is far too crowded.”
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描述： The festival is an event on the beach where families fly hundreds of kites. 评价： It is far too crowded, so moving between the stalls takes patience. 第二句补上了理由。见 L02。
5. 改进这句话：“The food stalls were good.”
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例如：“The food stalls were the festival’s best surprise because each one sold only a single dish, so the queues moved quickly and everything tasted fresh.” 这句有观点、理由和效果。只要有理由和细节，其他答案也可以。见为看法提供依据。
6. 哪个理由是循环论证？为什么？(a) “The show was boring because it was not interesting.” (b) “The show was boring because the same song was repeated four times.”
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(a) 是循环论证：not interesting 只是重复了 boring。(b) 给出了可核对的细节，即重复的歌曲。见 L03。
7. 找出称呼方式的切换：“If you come to the festival, you will enjoy the lights. One should bring a jacket, because visitors can get cold, and we recommend sitting near the stage.”
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称呼从 you 换成 one，再换成 visitors，又换成 we。一致的写法：“If you come to the festival, you will enjoy the lights. Bring a jacket, because you can get cold, and sit near the stage.” 见保持一致的读者称呼。
8. 哪一组语体混杂？(a) “Please keep the walkway clear. Kites can block the exits.” (b) “Visitors are respectfully advised to refrain from flying kites near the stage. Just don’t do it, guys.”
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(b)。 第一句很正式，第二句很随意。(a) 保持在同一个礼貌亲切的层次。见 L04。
9. 为不喜欢拥挤的读者，写两句关于 Night Kite Festival 的推荐。
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例如：“If crowds tire you out, go early on the first evening, when the beach is half empty and the kites are already up. You will still see the lights without waiting in a queue.” 它点明了读者，给出条件，并且呼应前面提到的缺点。见以相关建议作结尾。
10. 这个结尾哪里弱？“That is all I wanted to say. Thank you for reading. Bye!”
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它没有提到节日本身，没有给建议，也没说适合谁。感谢、道别和关于文章本身的宣布，都是结尾要避免的。换成一个决定，例如：“Go if you love bright, busy evenings, and bring a friend to carry the kite.” 见 L05。
如果你做错了
用下表决定先复习哪一课。
| 错误类型 | 复习这一课 |
|---|---|
| 宣布任务，或对着考官写 | 大众读者的开头 |
| 事实句里夹着意见，或大段复述剧情 | 描述与评价 |
| 只用 good、nice 等词，没有理由或细节 | 为看法提供依据 |
| 在 you、one、people、we 之间切换，或正式与口语混用 | 一致的读者称呼 |
| 以感谢、新话题结尾，或没有建议 | 相关的推荐语 |
复习之后，用自己选的新对象再做一次同类题，并在写作修改对照视图里比较两次的答案。有些学生在老师陪读时更容易看出错误的规律，这正是 English as a Second Language 线上一对一补习可以提供的。